Comments : Disappointed Beats

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    First/second- you set the tone right away again in my opinion. You are radiating with sadness you can tell. I love the imagery you provide. The tears are a very nice touch. It shows that you care about this person for oneand sad that they disappeared from your life. Maybe even you are thinking of the mmemory of them walking away or leaving your life. I love the use of the word confusion here especially in your blood, like your blood is flowing with sadness and that sadness makesyour blood freeze. I love the way you worded this stanza though. It tells me that you care about this pperson so much that even though they hurt you you cannot walk away no matter what you do.

    Third/end- This wording is very great here too. You cry with loyalty and you create a puddle of tears of memories even. You want everything to turn back and be what it used to be before the hurt. Now you realize this person will never be with you again. The ending is also very very sad. I love how you said your heart is weeping too. You are saying your heart is truly alive hereand it really is. I believe you are saying thatyour heart will be crying until this person returns. Again this is a very sad poem that holds so much sadness. Great write. Xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Loved this title it is awesome the poem is sad you had someone but they left and now you miss them and want them back it is truly sad when someone we care about leaves all we do is think about them really sad and emotional here hope you find peace my friend always peace&love midnight sky