by Hellon
This haiku has me both excited and confused but...it is most definitely a haiku or....is it? Suffice to say, I do love it anyway so...here are my thoughts... |
I agree with Hellon that story should be changed to legend. It would fit perfectly in the syllable count and make the ending much stronger. |
by Redangelwings
Dashiel- This poem has such a beautiful flow and tone to it. I believe the way you write about flowers is the best I have ever seen. Okay. First of all spring time is great to use here. And that's when all the flowers seemto sstart to come to life. I like the use of dreams as well. I think what you are saying is that with a new birth becomes new dreams. |