Comments : Catharsis

  • 10 years ago

    by Saturos

    Perhaps if you could articulate all the woes of your soul's enduring, then maybe people would feel what it is that you feel. My imagination painted this picture of a person drawing symbols on a scroll with their bleeding fingertip, as if to release all that was inside. It's short and to the point, which is all that is needed sometimes; love it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hellon

    My feeling is that this is how you perceive yourself rather than how the word perceives you? The fact the you have not capitalized most of the i's gives me the impression that you see yourself as small and insignificant ..perhaps that's how you want to be for the moment.

    Maybe the blackness represents low self esteem? Not sure but it definitely made me think and I enjoy that in a poem:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I loved the message of this poem and though its short it packs a strong one. What I see with this poem is you want to get rid of all the bad things in your life by writing them out in a secret journal or something like that. It's easy to feel lost or a tragedy when you get hurt. But just remember to treasure the good days. I loved again the story and the deep meaning of this. I loved the tone of it and how it suddenly changes. Great write

  • 10 years ago

    by Sincuna

    I think it's creative that you took the voice, the persona, of catharsis here, it is something rarely done and could come of as self-satisfying. Almost like staring at your multiple selves while trapped in room full of mirrors.

    This catharsis poem is cathartic because we, as writers, can also feel empathy with it.

    and smear it
    like dark, black ink
    into secret confessions
    ^ nicely done.

    The ending was also witty, I don't see anything wrong with the negativity: the loneliness, the rejection, the guilt and affliction we feel in reading a poem... they do not harm us, they are actually lullabies for wounded souls. And this makes such catharsis successful.

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I love the style here and how you made such a short piece say so much. The voice in this is not only clear and unique but very interesting as well.

    As dark as this is, I really enjoyed it. Very well penned.