by Sunshine
It's been a busy year, I kind of stopped writing, but for poetry, it's kind of something I m really passionate about. IF I am not to write, I am no bet to read.. |
Just my opinion, but I feel like this was one of your best writes! |
by Beautiful Soul
This poem really made me smile and laugh because of the meaning behind it. I loved the vocabulary you used in spots because it adds so much to this and I don't think it takes away from the story or flow of the poem. The use of schadenfreude made me smile because I have never seen it used in a poem. Well done for that. Now the poem itself has a pretty dark deeper meaning and I loved the imagery you used to enhance everything. I think the meaning is simple. I may seem like a good person but deep down inside I will use you to get what I want. Lol. I loved how you didn't really use a "character" per se you just used I and you. That makes the readers mind run wild. At least it did for me. :). I loved the story of it in a way. Though the ending wraps it up greatly which is why I loved it. It pretty much says I can be good or bad and you will never know who I really am. I liked that because I think a lot of people hide their "true" selves to keep from getting hurt. You twisted this though and made it see the darkside oof a certain person. Great write. |