Comments : Severed-in

  • 11 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    Sinister.. I love it. Lost me near the end there. I think the poem would be better if it ended around the fourth paragraph. 5/5

    -Dean

    • 11 years ago

      by Salvingcams

      Thank you for your comment. I wasn't really focusing on the structure...I just had it all out. You know
      I was so angry that nothing mattered and the words just flowed.
      Anyways, thank you again

  • 10 years ago

    by Misundertood

    Wow that is a great read and i like the whole poem its great

  • 10 years ago

    by Lune de ma vie

    Excellent write here. I loved every minute of it you did such a vivid job!