by Justanothertwit
I love the intensity of this poem, it feels so full of pain (resentment?) and the words feel very packed with emotion. It's very creative. |
by Redangelwings
First- I think we all have at least one person we want to disappear from our lives. I love how you compare a snowflake to a person as well. But you used a sad tone here and there are many things I can get deeper into here. you used snow so that tells me it's winter time and you think of winter of being a time of cold and sadness. So I believe that ties in so well here though. You are sad and just want this person to disappear. we all want the snow to disappear fast so spring will come and then we can be happier. |
Wow, what a powerful opening! You want this person to disappear so badly, just like a snowflake that melts when it touches the ground. |