Comments : Melted Snowflake

  • 11 years ago

    by Justanothertwit

    I love the intensity of this poem, it feels so full of pain (resentment?) and the words feel very packed with emotion. It's very creative.

    I also really appreciate the symbolism here, a comparison to a snowflake is very clever.

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    First- I think we all have at least one person we want to disappear from our lives. I love how you compare a snowflake to a person as well. But you used a sad tone here and there are many things I can get deeper into here. you used snow so that tells me it's winter time and you think of winter of being a time of cold and sadness. So I believe that ties in so well here though. You are sad and just want this person to disappear. we all want the snow to disappear fast so spring will come and then we can be happier.

    Second- This stanza is very sad. It says a lot too though. First of all you say damage and that says a lot.What kind of damage? Who really knows. Second ofall you say on route from the sky. In my mind that says a lot as well. I think you mean that you let this peperson into your life and the more days that passed by the more and more they hurt you. You want this person disappear from your life. Also your memories. Its more difficult with the memories I feel like the memories are more difficult to deal with because they are personal to you. I love how you ended this as well because you wrap up the story well. We all wish that one person was gone but in the end we have to learn how to heal. This is a very unique poem overall. The use of a snowflake is very soft on such a strong topic. Well done. Xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Wow, what a powerful opening! You want this person to disappear so badly, just like a snowflake that melts when it touches the ground.

    I may be reading too much into this, but I think it relates good to this so I'm going to say it anyway. lol

    This person is a snowflake, yes? Before it can snow it has to be below freezing... so that signifies that they are a cold hearted person... and you, you are the ground... you aren't cold enough for them to stick, you are warm and inviting... so when they instantly touch you, they melt. So you haven't let them turn you frigid. You may despise them for how they treated you and have left some damage along the way and wish they would disappear, but you will be fine... you may be 'chilly' but still never cold enough to let him stick.

    I may be a little off track... sorry about that, lol. But I do love this and think it's wonderful and has a lot of punch to be such a short poem! <3