Tears Of Ink

Edited, unrelated to the poem.

First- I actually love this idea that your pen can cry. I agree that when people write "sad" poems their pen does cry onto paper. They want to let their emotions out so badly and it's like they are crying with words. I like the tone you set here. You want to be free from all of this pain and writing does help with that at times but other times it's still hard to deal with the memories of your past. I think the first step is always the hardest and even writing it can bring back horrible memories so you are strong just writing this.

Second- I love how you used the word echoes here. That tells me your past is haunting you everynight and maybe even while you sleep you are having nightmares. I also like freeze for your heart. I think that says that your heart when you feeling like this is only feeling one emotion and you can't seem to feel free from it. It seems like your emotions are taking over your body and heart and there is nothing you can do about it at all. I think we have all felt like this.

Third/end- As I said earlier writing can be very freeing. But I love how you said tears of ink. You personify the pen and make it seem so real like your writing really is crying just not in metaphor. Anyway the ending brings a little bit of hope here. You hope someday to be set free and you will someday as time will heal you. :). I liked this poem overall too. It was a very unique and refreshing write. Great job!

First stanza: I like the imagery of the pen crying for you, leaking tears of ink that your heart pours onto paper.

Should "by gullible heart" be my?

Second stanza: Each word brings back the memories that haunt you. It's somewhat bittersweet for it opens up old wounds but yet writing helps you heal.

You continue to write your past hoping that one day you will be able to be free, that you will be able to move on. I hope you are able to soon, dear. <3