Comments : Cycle Of Loneliness

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    Okay this is a poem that has my comment muse running wild. Haha.

    First line- There is so much you are saying here. I think many people can seem really nice but I get what you are saying. Anyone can seem nice at all but sometimes their true colours come alive. Again I liked the connection between the lines here.

    The second line- When you have been hurt paranoia strikes your heart and you get trapped somewhere in between. I like how you say awakens too. In my mind Ithink it was ddormant before then this person falls for you and you think they will hurt you. Then then last line. I love..

    I loved the metaphor you seemed to use. Yellow is considered to be sunshine and happiness. I believe each life holds this until you do get hurt. I like both sides to this as well. Black is considered to be known for darkness and depression. Before you were happy and when hurt and paranoid feeling come in you push people away. This is a great poem overall though.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I'm liking these little bursts of power senyru's you are posting, girly! They hold so much depth within such short lines, why I love them so.

    You are skeptical of this persons kindness for it hasn't turned out well for you in the past. You have trusted someone at first due to their kindness and then later, they showed their true colors. I think that's the case for a lot of situations... upon meeting someone, they want to give off the 'best first impression' so they give off this fake smile and conversations, completely being someone they aren't... and then after some time, you realize they aren't that kind and sweet person you thought they were.

    I like the ending because it fits well with what I said about true colors forming. I think that's probably where you got your inspiration? Yellow is the universal color for happiness and black signals something dark creeping... whether it be a somber mood or something sinister.

    I think that the colors can both be identified to how this person is, yellow then black... and then also your mood once you figure out that they are that type of person. You were happy at first, but then your internal instinct kicked in to tell you to beware, so therefore maybe you feel a little 'black' now... a little lonely and wondering if that 'yellow' person will ever show up in your life and continue to brighten up your life.