Comments : The Canvas Within My Poetry

  • 11 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I like the tones in the poems, it has some calm ones then I feel some angrish(if that is a word) ones.

    this part stopped me when I was reading

    Now,
    I am broken
    smelling the
    scent of
    a beer...

    ^I think it would sound smoother if you just say, the scent of beer?

    I enjoyed the read.