Comments : Sarcodes Spring (Haiku)

  • 10 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    I love it :). The wording and flow are beautiful and so is the imagery. When spring is bloomed from winter the world seems to become more beautiful. I love the word sarcodes because it only brings in spring time. Though I had to look it up.The last line is beautiful as well because of the way it's worded. Overall.this is a very heart warming poem because of the imagery it holds Inside. Your poems are very inspiring dashiel. You make me want to keep writing. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Like the imagery within this short write..good one.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sylvia

    When using a form, it is always a good idea to include the requirements for the form so that a reader, judge, etc., can ensure you met the requirements. When it comes to forms I am a stickler for meeting the form requirements, no exceptions and HAIKU is one that I am unforgiving on. People tend to use the form in many ways not outlined as a requirement and I am not a fan of that. If there are requirements for an item, MEET them, as outlined. LOL

    Your Haiku is in the present tense, is about nature and a season and the syllable count is right on. Although you sort of cheated by using the apostrophe in memories to make it 2.

    What I take away as a reader is that you used amber to refer to "older memories". I believe amber is formed from bits and pieces of leaves, trees, wood etc., after years and years of being in the earth under pressure. The older memories come to life in the present by watching it snow on dainty flowers, Sarcodes in the Spring creating a tale of Winter. WELL DONE DASHIEL.

    Had to lookup Sarcodes, sounds pretty but deadly at the same time. Sarcodes is a monotypic genus of a single springtime flowering plant in the heath family containing the single species Sarcodes sanguinea, commonly called the snow plant or snow flower. It is a parasitic plant that derives sustenance and nutrients from mycorrhizal fungi that attach to roots of trees. It is unable to photosynthesize

    Haiku Definition and Requirements
    Below is the most popular definition, but there is more to haiku than meets the eye:

    Haiku (also called nature or seasonal haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables(5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all. Haiku is usually written in the present tense and focuses on nature (seasons).

    The 5/7/5 rule was made up for school children to understand and learn this type of poetry. For an in depth description of Haiku, please visit the Shadow Poetry Haiku, Senryu, and Tanka section. There is much more to haiku than the made up 5/7/5 version.

  • 10 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Another thing to know about haiku is that haiku doesn't start with any capital letters nor does it uses a period at the end :]

    Nice piece, you got all the main important requirements.