Comments : Balloon.

  • 11 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    The title is very simple but you represent and write is incredibly. I am not sure and this is just my opinion but I think you wrote it from the point of view of the balloon. Which enhances it greatly. I like how you started out as well. I think you are saying that if the balloon "eats" it grows bigger and bigger and that in turn makes it a frenzy or madness occurs. The part about shadows makes the imagery great here. I can see it playing out through out my head and it makes me smile. I think you give such innocence to something that is immanent and make it seem so real. It seems the "bigger" the balloon gets the more sad it becomes and again I love how you seem to give a voice to the balloon. Like it seems it has real emotions. Overall this is a wonderful write because it's very very unique from what I have read. :). Great write.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I notice how you write so effortlessly MaryAnne when you are personifying something, or relating someone to an object. You really write beautiful and you captivate me with each line.

    I don't know whether you are writing from the point of view of a balloon, to me it seems that this poem comes from deeper inside you. As if you are talking about how you feel like a balloon sometimes when you eat...or maybe it's even deeper than that but still, a write that was well done.

    xx