When you fall in love with your poems

Judges comment:

What a vivid piece of poetry. The use of the word spatters is really interesting, like a patterned toss. There seems like such anger here, rather than a sadness like I read through the first time. This poem is definitely feeling like an attack, and the ending makes me feel like the writer has written so many poems about a person.. and they want that person to read them. Perhaps then they'd understand? Intriguing poem

Then pencil calls 911.
Sirens and ambulances
compete against traffic lights.
Too late, pen turns into a safeguard
dives in, secures them

but words die in its grasp.

--- Your poem is so sad, but it is the truth. I love brevity by the way. And you are really good at it. Hannah is also good. May be you two could do a collab? :]

I picture an extremely intense argument (or messy breakup) where one person was clearly armed with vicious words and had the intent to 'kill' with them.

I really like the line "Spatters on your face" it gives the feeling that the other person couldn't fight back, that you wouldn't let them because you made the last strike

It feels very vivid.

Loved the idea here, especially the splashing of blood on the face after murder. The imagery is grippling and very vivid. And the way it attaches a symbolic meaning for author and the creation of one's work makes it more impactful. I'd use the word "spatter" than splash though, it's more fitting. :)

This is an awesome piece :))) I love the title and everything :))) Yeah... Sometimes we drown when we let ourselves swimming in the the pool of pride.

--- MKKK