I instantly added this to my favorites before I even commented on it.

This poem is.... amazing. I love everything about it. I love the way you broke it down, the shortness of the lines, the historical facts, the details and the love that is etched into this poem.

I love the addition of Spanish.. makes it seem more real. And it really brings out the background story of who you are and sets up the rest of what the readers learn about the Philippines. I love learning new things and adding in facts really caught my attention.

The brevity of the lines caught my breath.. it's like the way you do it, it is short.. like a stutter almost.. like trying to explain something to someone but the nervousness makes you choke up. I love it. I do... the way the poem breaks down is.. amazing.

I can't explain my love for this.

It's perfect. The ending is amazing. I love the fact that this person makes you proud of who you are and your heritage... that takes a whole new level of love and I see that here and it is... fantastic.

Definitely 5/5

Deeply bravo!! Wonderful description and overall poem

I was so absorbed in this poem...I have a few Filipino friends who I fondly call flips..they don't seem to mind, so I am familiar with some of the things you talk about here..the person (a hero) the final poem and the language (no..I don't speak it). Anyway...as I said ...totally absorbed until this...

My heart
is a colony
of yours...
Like how...(this line here interrupted the flow I felt...it just sounded wrong and unpoetic for some reason?)
Spain colonized
the Philippines,
you can
have it
for 333 years.

Anyway...just my thoughts that you should have another look at this part. You are obviously very proud of your heritage and that's grand...I'm very proud of mine also. Very enjoyable read.

Hi dashiel sorry it took me so long to comment but now I have my thoughts straight. This I agree is a very beautiful dedication to who you are no matter what people say about you. I loved how you stay consistent through out the poem this time as well. I can tell here you went out of your confort zone and wrote strongly from inside your heart and I loved it. Obviously you take very much pride in your heritage. I think what you are saying through out is that you are very happy for your freedom. I also loved how you seemed to personalise this and it shows how much you care for this one person. You also seem to be speaking "one voice" for all of your country members which I thought added a very loving touch. I can tell here how nuch you again take pride in the love of your country. You make the character seem so real and I think you tried to make us see through your eyes and I believe you did a wonderful job. I read through this a few times and didn't see any errors :). Very beautiful write overall though.

Simply Awesome!!

Lovely poem...written in artistic way with an beautiful image running in mind.
Loved everything abt it.

all the best & take care

This is the type of poem that captivates me! I enjoyed reading it. It's the voice and tone of the poem that just grabs me and absorbs me and makes me feel how you are feeling- proud to be who you are. Great write.

There is a voice to your poems which pulls the reader into the writer's world and the mind moves with the flow. Liked the vivid images which engages the mind too..beautifully penned!