Comments : Cerebrum

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    First- This is a very detailed poem and it took me a while to form my opinion. I believe what you are saying here is that you are in your room with a locked door and dreans are haunting your mind. You are crying because a person you love is no longer with you. Winter holds bad memories for you. I love the use of virgin. You make "snow" seem very beautiful and pure even though you write about something dark it seems. I also love the word spy used for dreams. I think you mean that your dreams become a reality for you.

    Ending- Wow this is a great ending. One of the best I've read in a long time. I like the use of the dots as well it gives it a time lapse thats well written here. Time has hushed for you here. Autumn comes with loss and now winter means being alone with nightmares. I loved the last line. You make it stand out on it's own and you did well for it. It's quite powerful. The reunion is in your dreams maybe so you love the night time so you don't feel so "alone" peaceful is a very strong word as well because it's very light and the rest of the poem is heavy with emotion. Overall again. You said so very much in such a little poem. Your words hold so much beauty. Nominated :)