by Robert Dec 6, 2013
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
My life isn't perfect, and it's definitely not the best |
by Beautiful Soul
I like this poem because you hold the consistency of sadness. It sucks when you lose a loved one. It feels like your whole world crashes down. I like the way yoiu worded this too. Each line holds a hint of sadness growing more sad with the story. I can see this as a poem based on reality as well. Overall though I saw no flaws at all. You did a great job |
by Sylvia
Robert I understand the message and emotions you are feeling and putting forth with these words. It is lacking that punch to the gut that is hovering right beneath the surface of each word. With just a few changes, taking out some and's, I, this poem would grab the reader, shake them and they would have no doubt of how you feel, because they would feel that way to. |
by Jyoti Rawat
This is nice. what u want to say in this I can feel. |
by Meena Krish
Loneliness swallows a person inside out and to get out of its grip is hard..I know and have been through it. |