Clay

I really appreciate the balance in this poem: the imagery and the story telling are beautifully matched. I'm amazed at how well the poet captured a single moment in so much detail without bogging down the poem unnecessarily. The description of the people not paying attention in the second stanza ("they kept chattering like mockingbirds trying to invoke music from nineteenth century choir lofts") is perfect. I love the history and the specifics that you included, and I love how you integrated your voice into the telling ("Defeated, you looked defeated"). Overall this is an excellent piece, it seems like you really understand your craft and your poetic voice.

Again another well written poem! I really enjoy your writings. :) Keep writing you have a serious gift!!!

This piece truly touched me MaryAnne, it really was beautiful to read. You draw me in every time you write, you leave a imprint in my heart and get me thinking...you are amazing...and I thank you for another awesome piece of poetry.

Love ya xx

Very happy you wrote this... I adore your ability to touch the reader and help them to relate... love this piece MaryAnne :-)