ya i agree its short n to the point!
mmm but i wonder if it would be beter if it were slightly longer. that way u could put in much more emotion...
but tis a good job

Well if this is true then girl stay strong - i know how it feels to be helpless but dont let it control your life. After its your life and i have big probs with my folks but i have learnt to take my life into my hands and live to put a smile on my face at the end of the day and not thier - i guess i discovered eventually that nothing would make them happy and i find i enjoy life so much more this way. ANyways whether you take my advice or not please take care and i wish all the best f luck. Stay strong and keep ya head up, great poem!!! xxoo

hi
I think you should of cept going to cuzit just kinda ends..it was cool tho
amanda

Great poem! You have a great way with words! Keep on writing!