by Beautiful Soul
I loved everything about this poem. The title speaks loud. I see it as this person is your spark or light. So I loved the use of lantern. It's always difficult to write about a person but you did so well here. Overall this poem is full of such great imagery and the words you decribed them with are outstanding. I loved how you describe everything about them with metaphors. It's like they come alive with your writing. I am going to pinpoint the third stanza here. The wording there is fantastic as you talk truly about how much they inspireyyou. The ending is lovely as well. Your heart will always be with them and your heart is the light. Or their heart is the light in your life :). Beautiful dedication. Nominated :) |
by Gwen Davis
I will learn someday to write this beautifully! Well written. |
by Sincuna
Beautiful write. Only criticism is that it ended too soon, but overall, it was consistent and accurate with its use of metaphors: |
by Rusheena
Excellent! The tone, the wordplay, and imagery is outstanding. You made love tangible, and you allowed us to see it through your eyes instead of from the outside looking in, if that makes any sense. |
by Narph
I really like this poem. Just everything about it: the imagery, the voice, the sentiment, it's all beautiful. To start, the descriptions the poet has used are satisfyingly relatable and effortless, without being cliche or sugarcoated. "Cigarette smoke film glazing the walls," already, I feel like I am in the room with you, like I remember the person you're writing about, like I want to help you peel the paint off those walls and follow you through the rest of the poem. It's truly an experience. I love the specifics: the guitar-picking fingers that connect the dots with your freckles especially. So vivid. But if I had to choose, I think the last stanza must be my favorite. I can't get over how beautiful it is. What a great, great poem. |
This was penned in unexplainable beauty, I loved this so much, it's flow was flawless soft smooth flowing , just pulling on the heart strings ... |
by Jenni Marie
Judging comment: |
For now I'm going to keep it short and sweet cause I'm all teary eyed and can barely see my screen.your words pulled at strings in my heart that I was hoping I'd hidden well, they bring back memories of a love I once had,I guess I'm not the only one haunted by the spirit of beautiful lost love... |
by Mr. Darcy
Hi, |
Thank you dear :) |
by William Mae
This poem is so well written, composed perfectly. The emotion is so easily felt in each line. |
by William Mae
This poem is so well written, composed perfectly. The emotion is so easily felt in each line. |