Blackened

One of the things that stands out to me the most with this piece is the rhythm, you did a wonderful job there, though I agree that the last stanza could be styled differently for a better flow or more impact/emphasis on what seems to be the most important point of the piece, Hope is a beast. (quoting you more or less)

There really is no true critique I can give except what has been mentioned, but all in all otherwise the piece is strong and well penned. You get a point across and you described it in a very interesting way.

There is a lot of strength and power here, also a unique tone and voice pairing (at least to me) that made the whole thing pop just a little more.

Nice job,

Great write.

I think this has potential and I see what you are doing with the short lines, but I think they may be almost a little too short. One-line words like here fragment the poem a little too much in my opinion, and it becomes more about reading the poem than reading what is in it. (hope that makes sense). So with just a little punctuation and structure reshuffling, I think this can be improved and work better. Something like this might help it flow a little better:

I am not
a miracle. My bloody heart
pounds in rhythm
to beating voices,
beating,
beating,
beating
on my percussion ribcage.

Sympathy bites like shrapnel.

I am not the odds -
my tongue chokes
itself on bright futures
and black lies as I
nod,
nod,
nod.

Hope is not
a Dove.

It is a Beast.

^^
Just changed things around a little but to me it's already a little improved. I'd advise you to play around with it because I think it is a pity to have a decent poem falling down on something easily changed like punctuation.

Wow. This poem is very powerful. I loved the shortness of it but being short it must hold a strong message and this does no doubt. I loved the use of heart. And I loved the repeat of beating. It was like your was beating. The ending is so very powerful. It holds a great message standing out on its own i feel. You are full of hope and now it seems to be fading. Overall the wording is strong and i wpuld change nothing. Well done!.