Comments : Sehnsucht

  • 10 years ago

    by Abed

    "thinking to myself how a big man
    could turn off radios but not a woman. "
    ^ haha!

    iPhone-fiddled finger...
    ^ I adore your descriptions... very fresh and modern, yet poetic!

    Flawless piece.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sincuna

    What I enjoy about your style of poetry is that they carry these internal reflections that are agreeable for the reader. There is always a personality in your writing that introduces the author's idea and thought process. They are also very fresh and modern like what Abed said above.

    :the sun seems to look down on sheep
    and their lazy ways, snout burried in grass:

    ^ really liked this line for some reason. It's perfectly timed and inserted in the poem and it's narration. The image and tone gives the impression that the speaker envies the sheep just as she desires to lie supine upon a meadow.

    Nicely written. :)