Comments : The girl in the hallway (tanka)

  • 10 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    First off- Very creative and powerful message Larry, wrapped in the tanka form, I LIKE!

    I said like for a reason, of course I like the poem but in reference to facebook I can't help but wonder if the ladies who post pictures of puckered lips and free kisses are in any way comforted by the "likes" they receive. I truly admired the title for this piece.. " A girl in the hallway" posing a self portrayal of the need to be admired or liked... there are so many angles I can go with this piece... and that is why I feel the need to nominate! Very powerful Larry, well done!

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I agree with Andrea. There are so many ways you can take this. Going from the title I imagine this girl is a student of a high school or college. Nowadays in the world the world is all about electronic and social media. I loved the word honoured. That stood out to me well. I think it gives a girl a "soft" and beautiful soul or appearance. I can see this girl also being a "popular" kid. Again like maple said there are so many ideas this can sprout. And from the poetry stand point. You did a great job with the syllable count and wrote a beautiful and strong message. Well done

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I love how vague this is and yet how it manages to scream so many things (but I guess that could be cause i'm a teen and enough of my friends are caught up in selfies and blogging... to an unhealthy extreme even). very creative take on the modern set up of society. Anyway, sorry for my mini rant, very well written and I especially love the title.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Very good and insightful of life today.