After you

Judging Comment:

There were a lot of poems this week with complex thoughts and images, but this piece stood out to me for it's bare honesty and simplicity. Yaki's evoked strong emotion and realism in just a few lines and the whole piece is so effortless and accessible, I think anyone could feel what I felt upon reading it. My two favorite lines were: "In every set of brown eyes that I found under every rock, behind every shadow"... what a beautiful line. I think the idea could have been expanded a bit more, but it may have overwhelmed the poem, so I like it still, and "nothing as intimate as having you on the corner of my bed watching me from the corner of your eyes." Clever word play and clever imagery. Your words mean a lot Yaki. This is a really well written piece.

The title caught my eye and wanted to explore it. Found this poem had a lot more emotional war within the piece which was making me want to read more..touching write.

WONDERFUL WRITE, CONGRATS!!!

POSTED. I haven't written in forever. Thanks for the idea Yaki!

Omggggg I don't know I don't know.