Could this be just another punishment
where one has to keep reliving the same day
and feeling those painful feelings each moment
only to close my eyes
and find the light above as the only hope
this pit felt so cold and lonely
water dripping and slippery rocks all around me
unable to climb above the pain and regrets
that keep grasping me toward an ending
how could this love be so painful inside?
dear,dear,dear
what have i done now
i spoke too soon and bet on something true
only to lose it all and left with limited time
to keep reflecting upon my mistakes and tears
these feelings won't go away
these memories won't leave me in peace
i'm thinking about her once more
even when time was meant to be the cure to everything
just tell me "i'm an fool" already
because i'm trapped in this pit for too long
i'll never trust again or believe
in the feeling of true love
when i'm still trying my best to overcome
this lost love that tossed me into this pit of sadness
"this pit felt so cold and lonely
water dripping and slippery rocks all around me
unable to climb above the pain and regrets
that keep grasping me toward an ending"
-By reading that, i saw different kinds of images in my head, good job on being descriptive
"just tell me "i'm an fool" already
because i'm trapped in this pit for too long
i'll never trust again or believe
in the feeling of true love
when i'm still trying my best to overcome
this lost love that tossed me into this pit of sadness "
-the last stanza was very sad, moving on isnt really that easy.. you portrayed your feelings well,, all in all i think the poem was great 5/5 :)