by lacie Jan 22, 2014
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
I don't want to loose you |
by lacie
Thnk you this poem reflect upon me i really did love that person |
by Beautiful Soul
There are a couple of things I would change. First of allloosing sshould be losing. And I understand why you didn't use punctuation but I would. Though this is pretty free flowing, a pause would be great here and there. Otherwise. I can understand the emotion flowingthrough this poem. The ttone is sad but it's great because it's consistent. There is so much hurt inside the words you write. The chatacter seems to be losing everything arpund them and thry cannot cope anymore. Life is very hard and we all go through ups and downs. There is love as well because I can tell the writer really loves this person. Nice write |