I think this poem is much better than what you've been writing :). I cannot pinpoint the true meaning though. Very difficult and your metaphor usage is grsat here! . Ilove how you started with and though. Just like with my poem it pulls you into a story that is in the middle. You leave the rreader guessing and I think it makes for a better write! . What I think the poem is about though is you are growing up into a new person. I say this because of the title and you said ashes. You I think someone close to you has passed away and you had to bury their ashes. And they are thinking about them and they have come back. You choke on their words and lies. I'm not even close I know but I really love this poem. The wording is great in spots and really work well! Nominated when I can!

There you go, this feels more like you. :)
A little bit more and I could finally say its so so so you.

Wonderful!!!

A great piece of poetry Hannah...you write beautifully, with such emotion and imagery that I find myself being carried into another world, into the poem.

We all feel like we are ghosts of ourselves at some point in our lives, we find we are changing and we can lose sight of ourselves often.

Really great poetry x

Great job amazingly written 5/5. :-)

I think asphyxiate's should be asphyxiates.

:)

You have a gift Hannah <3

Your wording within this poem makes me smile.. I adore reading your poetry because it brings me a sense of calm.. which is what I prefer when reading poetry and along with creativity comes angles that I can create in my mind while reading. Beautiful and elegant comes to my mind with this poem :-)