by Midnight Sky
Very inspirational poem here nice job i felt it my friend |
by Kakera
Inspirational? How? |
by Beautiful Soul
I must first say wow. You are a brilliant mind with your words. I personally didn't see any technical flaws so I will leave a comment :). This poem is not really "inspirational" not really. But I loved how you used your emotions here. At the start of the poem there seems to be a friendship or really love. Because this character helped you through a lot of tough times it seems. I feel like the title fits perfectly with the poem because person helped you "pull through" the dark or sad times in your life. I was really fond of the simple wording in some lines. Like "sharing a toothbrush instead of a bed" that line tells me you think love inside is more imporamt then the out :). I liked the story overall because it starts out "happily" or normal but the end turns tragic. Though you leave a mystery od how this person left your life. Did they pass away or walk away? Who knows. I also liked the painkillers line, it really is irony how they work. Though you are in emotional pain they make it worse. The ending three stanzas are powerful. Because you the world is cruel you think there is no God andthe cuts on your wrisr, prove you are not strong by yourself. Overall this is a wonderful poem/story. Beautiful! |