Good job here really my friend

All that glitter, has not been gold. Within every scar, healing dells.

Brittany, I really enjoyed this as I've never read anything quite like it so it's rather unique which makes me want more from you.

Dying for your love
Like a man fights for his country
^^
A very powerful start and we all want love but to compare it to a man fighting for his country shows how much you want this.

My heart was the battlefield
Your love was the gun
^^
I love this parts it doesn't really give anything away so could be interpreted in 2 ways that je shattered your heart with his gun (love) or he targetted it and made things alright and o believe we will find pit throughout the poem.

Your kiss the trigger
Damn, baby you shot me down
^^
It's obvious you kissed him and enjoyed it which is one of the reasons you like him. Maybe his kisses were the best, who knows :)

Damn baby I fell and hit the ground
You didn't utter a sound
^^
Ahh, he caught you then chewed you up and spat you back out. Bloody men (I bet they say the same about is though haha)

As I shattered to pieces
You didn't feel anything
^^
When love turns sour the other person doesn't care unfortunately most of the times but we live and learn.

But I took the fall
I believed in you
^^
When we believe in someone and they don't believe in us it's ashame but it happens.

Fantastic, Em

Brittany, I really enjoyed this as I've never read anything quite like it so it's rather unique which makes me want more from you.

Dying for your love
Like a man fights for his country
^^
A very powerful start and we all want love but to compare it to a man fighting for his country shows how much you want this.

My heart was the battlefield
Your love was the gun
^^
I love this parts it doesn't really give anything away so could be interpreted in 2 ways that je shattered your heart with his gun (love) or he targetted it and made things alright and o believe we will find pit throughout the poem.

Your kiss the trigger
Damn, baby you shot me down
^^
It's obvious you kissed him and enjoyed it which is one of the reasons you like him. Maybe his kisses were the best, who knows :)

Damn baby I fell and hit the ground
You didn't utter a sound
^^
Ahh, he caught you then chewed you up and spat you back out. Bloody men (I bet they say the same about is though haha)

As I shattered to pieces
You didn't feel anything
^^
When love turns sour the other person doesn't care unfortunately most of the times but we live and learn.

But I took the fall
I believed in you
^^
When we believe in someone and they don't believe in us it's ashame but it happens.

Fantastic, Em