by Hellon
Hello...where the heck have you been hiding? I don't comment unless the member is signed in at the same time as me and...that can be a problem for anyone out with Australia but...here you are in my own country and...I've missed you thus far...anyway...nothing short of brilliant is this poem...it could do with a little more punctuation and...I really hate using it myself but..certain styles need it and this is one of them..I really love this poem and...will nominate it when the weekend freeze is lifted...I'm gonna be watching out for you now :) |
by Maher
Hi. I've been in Sydney...working, coming home...trying to sleep but have failed miserably at that lately haha. Thank you VERY much for commenting and nominating it - it's really unexpected! I've fixed some punctuation in there. I wrote it while half asleep. It was inspired by someone I met on here yesterday actually. She told me her story and it lead to this. I normally write songs but poems come around here and there :) |
by Hellon
This is going to be one of those poems that I will stalk on here...honestly I love it soooo much and...if I could give you extra points for spelling bare correctly (as opposed to bear which I find even published authors are using (Jodi Picoult for example) I would...a bear is an animal after all...anyway..I really do hope the judges have a good read at this one... |
by Maher
Thank you once again. I never thought of my writing as any good but you're starting to change my perception on this. It really means a lot! Hopefully I'll be inspired to write more someday |
This indeed deserves to be on the front page. Beautiful and will add to my favorite |
by Maher
Thank you very much :) |
by Meena Krish
A deep and moving write. There is so much to grasp from this write and revel in its meaning. A well deserved win! Congrats :) |
by Maher
Thanks very much! :) Never expected it to win haha |
Spectacular. |
by Maher
Thank you :) I love weaving either stories or conceit into the poems or songs I write. It's a habit I picked up from my English teacher back in high school. Thanks for the feedback, very kind. |
I'm glad this won Simply brilliant. I almost feel inferior commenting! |
by Maher
Thank you very much for the feedback. Nothing to feel inferior about! It was a fluke that I came up with this. Probably never write anything like it again haha :) |
I liked it. |
by Maher
Thank you :) |
Congrats!!!! Well deserved. |
by Maher
Thank you! :) |
by Maple Tree
Elegance is the first word that describes this piece, true Elegance! |
by Maher
Thank you kindly! Unlike some of my others, this one just flowed right out. The ones that come from the heart, are based on actual happenings or truths and hold a close connection with what I and others experience from day to day, are often the ones that have the most impact on others. I don't mean to sound conceited or anything, but it's true for a lot of writers on here and I'm sure they will attest to it too :) |
by BlueJay
This piece is well worth its win. The style is wonderful and the word choice worked very well in this piece. Absolutely love this write :) |
by Maher
Thank you, I really appreciate that :) |
by Angel Tears
Wow.. This was just beautiful. There's nothing else I can think to say! |
by Maher
That is more than enough, thank you! :) |
WOW. Beautifully written. Excellent use of feelings and raw emotions. And I agree, sometimes the best things just flow out without even trying. |
by Maher
Thank you for taking the time to read my work - very much appreciated :) |
by Aiko Hiraeth
I LOVE long detailed poems like this. What it presents itself to my mind as is a "review", basically, in poem form, of the world itself. How the humans have made the world, the monster the world has made itself, yet a changing one that tries so hard to become better. It has so much pictures within the words. |
by Maher
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it! :) |