Kalon

Amen i agree true love when it's done right can be both passionate & beautiful & amazing you nailed this piece my dear friend :) peace & love midnight sky

You give the word "depth" new meaning with this poem. When we speak of love making we talk of becoming one with the person we love. And you painted that picture all to clearly!

"braids herself within
his flesh and carves
forever into his spine"
^simply mind blown!

Amazing work!

Wow Hannah, this is quite beautiful. I like the idea of your title, and agree it fits the poem very well.

I like how this poem can be so innocent, and yet behind the lines there is the deeper meaning of beauty and appreciating it, and loving the beauty of others.

As always, your wording just amazes me!

xx

Let's see

canoodling?

Or just making love?

No title suggestion from me haha. But I really liked your poem. I loved here how you paid attention to the "details" of love and foreplay. The metaphor here is great I think because you stayed classy with your wording but you left a great painted picture through out. You can tell these people are truly in love and they show it to each other here. Passion is always great and I believe you wrapped up the whole thing well by the last line. Making love. :). There really is beauty in making love to the one you love because I feel like it enhances it greatly. Beautiful write about showing what true love is!