Comments : Unspoken words

  • 10 years ago

    by Midnight Sky

    Sweet lovely poem my friend :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    There are a couple of things to point out. I again think this would be better in a "stanza" format. And I believe the title doesn't do the poem justice. You could call it "unspoken words" or anything like that. Just what I think though :)

    The poem itself is really lovely though and I loved the meaning behind it. Your wording is very simple but I can tell how much you really love this person and how much they have your heart. The last bit is really my favorite because when you are in love the unspoken words or gestures are the best kind. Love can be a very scary thing but you did well to pour your heart out. Beautiful!

    • 10 years ago

      by Esperanza N M Ramirez

      You have a point though that would be a better title :) I am going to change it to that because that is the point of this writing. Thankss. &I'll try to make it rhyme but I probably won't be able to it won't hurt to try though.