Comments : The Hunt (an AVP poem)

  • 10 years ago

    by Karla

    A very interesting piece.

  • 10 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Just a wild guess, just for fun.

    Are this three stanza's written by Midnight sky?

    Now as the alien sees him
    Trying find a place to hide
    Just when the hunter thinks he's got him
    Just then he goes blind

    The alien jumps around
    Knowing it's getting to late
    Still fight until he breaks
    Hoping death won't be his fate

    The predator has been waiting for the moment
    When he knows the alien is off track
    Now the alien gonna live it seems
    Just then the predator kills him

    • 10 years ago

      by Lemon

      Yep haha :)

  • 10 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Very unusual but well done. There is a lot of skill in this piece, if nothing else. Creativity shines here in a very unique way from that of your typical poetry, or really any poetry that I've found to be honest.

  • 10 years ago

    by Blood of a Lion

    Not trying to be disrespectful of the work but a couple of the lines could be reworked to help the flow of it.

    While it is unique in its range (not being a love or suicidal piece that's far too common on here) I like that. I would just rework some of it just so it flows like a river.

    However goodwork and hope to see some more.

  • 10 years ago

    by LittleMsPink

    Interesting...