Blurred Vision

This is a very powerful poem. I liked the detailed wordsyou used. TThis is the kind of poetry I love. One that tells a very short story about a small moment of grief. That moment where it all falls apart and your emotions just bubble up. I like how you just went right into it and you start out strong. You let all your emotions out right away. The sadness here is great and you start out by showing the reader how you feel with the tears and the feelings. It's not easy to write about what's in your soul. It's always hard when one thing triggers us. I like the use of the word dormant toobbecause that tells me you were slowly getting better but one thing made it bad. The ending you show why. You are thinking about the bad things of your past and trying to let it out. Beautiful overall

Really enjoyed this piece loved the line the bitter melody of grief it show's power like a song beautiful job here can't wait to read your next p&l midnight sky