by DarkLight
1st there are some typos, line one 2nd stanza, stooped, instead of stopped, 3rd stanza, I's guess you wanted to write It's or Is, 4th line same stanza, noone instead of none. Last stanza, the word blackened, maybe you should have used the word darkened, those are just some of my suggestions and I hope you okay with my corrections. Other than than, I like your poem. |
by DarkLight
1st there are some typos, line one 2nd stanza, stooped, instead of stopped, 3rd stanza, I's guess you wanted to write It's or Is, 4th line same stanza, noone instead of none. Last stanza, the word blackened, maybe you should have used the word darkened, those are just some of my suggestions and I hope you okay with my corrections. Other than than, I like your poem. |
by LittleMsPink
Powerful poem, i really like this one |
by Lemon
That's what it's based on lol :) |
by stacy
Nice write zac !!!! :) |