by HiddenScars Mar 6, 2014
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
She falls to her knees with tears streaming down her face. She has a pain in her chest that nobody could ever describe. The true pain is heartbreak. She starts to write a letter, but her hand trembles and she drops her pen. All she was able to write was, "I'm moving onto a new place, where there's more people like me, the sinners and the ones who disgrace." Her thoughts are racing, bouncing up and down in her mind, she thinks to herself, "Why is this happening to me?" Then the voices inside her head are silent, and she lays there finally in peace with herself. |
by LoneWolf
This is beautiful. I feel like I can relate to it imagining that if I were dead. If I had passed on watching everybody suddenly care about me. I've visioned things like this and it's not a pleasant thing to think about. It all ends with a spark of happiness and I like that |
by Dragon Boy
Yeah i was gonna say it's more like a story, but a good story, i was able to picture all you were saying, i liked the way you wrote it.. very good.. sad poem .. good job on it .. |
by Dragon Boy
Yeah i was gonna say it's more like a story, but a good story, i was able to picture all you were saying, i liked the way you wrote it.. very good.. sad poem .. good job on it .. |
by Trinity Heart
This poem is really sad and beautiful |
by Burning Angel
Okay, i am having to read this and write at the same time just so i can talk about each paragraph.. First off, I love the beginning because since it is in the story format then i really was able to get into it. |
by HiddenScars
Thank you so much!<3 all of that feedback means so much to me(: thank you again |