There is not a lot I can say here because you said it all. The title I really like because you are begging someoneto not do something harmful to others or themselves. The mmetaphor ls you used is great as well because it holds a lot of truth. Smoking does kill the world around us and there is nothing we can do really. The people in the world nowadays are really set in their ways. I liked the line "blood on the street". Each cigarette is like a smoking gun. They will keep pulling the trigger and sadly people will die someday. Anyways. Great message and writing!

Wow, I love the meaning in the poem, and the message the stands clear.

It reminds me of the TV adverts when the small child is breathing in the smoke, and they are pleading with their parents to stop smoking. The children are not really aware of the damage it causes themselves, they focus more on knowing it can make their parents ill.

I think it highlights an important issue in society, one that is growing bigger, and I think your layout works really well to break the highlighted points up.

your ending is brilliant, showing how one persons choice, also affects others, and this is not just with smoking, this is just with everything. It always affects someone else.

nice job

Great job!

The message of this poem is so beautiful and true. I love how this poem is so descriptive and the imagery is great, different images came popping out my mind while reading this, good job

Your poem is far more effective and conveying the message. I could only picture a small child surrounded by rings of smoke while begging for fresh air..excellent!