Wow! This poem shows a lot of courage to write. So well done for coming to terms with who you are. There are a couple of grammar errors but they don't matter much. I am going to focus on the message. It seems like this poem is about a transgenered person who is coming to terms with who they really are. They are very afraid to be judged so it's hard for them to come out. I think all you can do is be honest with who you are because you are the person that matters. Though people have always told me it gets better if you can come out. I know how difficult it is because I am not out either. That fear shackles us. But I hope you can find the strength to come out because you are beautiful. :). Amazing and beautiful write. Stay strong.<3

I love this poem.so much! I came out at the age of 10 to my parents and it was kind of a "We already knew this!" And it was easy. If you're going thriugh this then please know that i am here if you wish to talk or if you need to vent!

I love the character in this poem because they know for a fact who they are and it seems as though they are jut scared of what could happen if they finally told someone but they really do seem to hate not being able to open up and let someone know!

This is a great write because there are so many peoplewho go through this and never really know how to explain this to anyone.

Beautiful!!! Beyond anything and dang girl you write this one very beautiful and I never told my parents I'm bi never told them my first crush and my first love were women they suspect but they don't know I wish I had the courage to write what I really am like in this poem good read :) 5/5

Onyx

This took so much courage to write! I'm in a lesbian relationship and my "girlfriend" is a stud. He whole heartedly feels like a man trapped in a womans body. It breaks my heart to see the struggle he goes through every day with accepting himself. The important this is to find a strong support group and surround yourself in them. Don't hide who you are, you'll regret it and I can't bare the thought of you hurting yourself because of who you are. You write beautifully.

-Gianna

Ha, wow this poem is very expressive, GREAT JOB. :)

Congrats on winning. so well deserved. I am glad I nominated this

A worthy win, a difficult write that gives us the POV of somebodies struggle with who they are inside.

enjoyed reading this and glad it won.

You're not alone. We're not alone. We never will be. Try not to forget that when it gets difficult to breathe.

Being a female and having the feelings of a male and vice versa, male knowing they are really female is being a Transgender person, not lesbian or gay. I know from all the research I have done and in fact have a friend going through the transition now male to female.

You did capture some of the feelings my friend has experienced. If this is truly how you feel you need to see a professional and get a diagnosis and make a choice to pursue the change or not to. My friend has regrets in that the process did not start when she was young. The results are better and she would have been happier for a longer period of time.

I love this. There is a lot of strength and sadness in this poem and it shows the battles that people go through when trying to accept who they are.

My parents don't know that I am in love with a girl, let alone that I'm bisexual. It's hard to come to terms with things when everyone seems to see it as a bad thing and shoots you down because they have different beliefs on it.
One of my friends firmly believes that I am only bisexual because I find the physical aspects of a woman to be pleasing but that is far from it. It's the emotional connection.

Anyway, I think you should be you. Find the pride that you have in yourself, the confidence, and let it shine.
You are your own person and have to find your own strength to stand. Their ridicule or dislike can only last for so long and hey, who knows, they may not even care.

Be you. You're living your own life and deserve to live it how you want and be the person that you truly are.

Not really into lesbians.

I am with you on this one. Woman on the outside, man on the inside. It's a hard place to be in. You captured the difficulties well. One grammatical comment "My parent's doesn't know" - either your parent doesn't know or your parents don't know. May just be a type:)

Judges comments

This poem gets my 4 points this week. Although technically it could do with a little polish, (its flow is a little stumbling here and there) the subject and the narrative is worthy of recognition. When we think of lesbians there are two stereotypes, we have the butch fat girl with short hair, tattooed beyond recognition, nose stud and somebody you wouldn't take on in a bar brawl. Or we have the more recent Hollywood stereotype 'The playboy blonde' or impossibly gorgeous women that every man lusts over who happens to be dating another impossibly gorgeous woman. But this poem shows us the true side. The real side. From the POV of a lady who is struggling with the way she is born, A man trapped in the body of a female and trying to come to terms with the challenges she is faced with everyday. The inevitable talk with the parents. The hope that she can live her life as she wants. The day that she can truly be he. Great job. 4 points.

Some things go against my beliefs but I have to come to terms like; "It is what it is"
and not looking at one's condition as worse than another's! I always love when Jesus defended a woman of the streets against the self-righteous Law abiding Pharisees, saying; Let those without sin cast the first stone! As a Minister I believe we can't point a finger at someone and say that their sin is worse than other sins, as God's word declares; "All have sinned and have come short of the glory of God" I like the poem for it's candidness and it's expressing of real life situation with the tremendous frustration that follow leading to despair. Great job! Ken gracefaithgift.com