5/5 just for the title. Fantastic write, instantly put images in my head of the people and the paintings and the room itself. Leaves me with a sick feeling on my tongue, I'm guessing this was your intention.

Dean.E

I agree the title is fantastic and so is the write. You leave the reader with a hit in the stomach feeling. And agree again that's what you were going for. I really liked the drastic side this the two characters. You paint the (painter or person who hurt you) as a ruthless person who will stop at nothing to hurt you. And you orthe girl is so fragile and with one touch her heart will shatter easily. I can kinda see this as a flashback or mmemory you are thinking about. The scars will always be there but they will heal. This person stole your innocence and it's sad. The wording is fantastic though because you used words that correspond with the tone you set. And the last stanza enhances that greatly. Anyways. Great poem because you let it all out.

I agree with the above, the title definitely is an eye-catcher! It fits because paedophile's are attracted to children and children like to paint pictures, so maybe that is his 'lure'. It's definitely unsettling and absolutely makes my blood boil to even think about, but as for the poem... it fits wonderfully.

I think within this poem though, the paintbrush is a metaphor for his fingers, his touch. I also think the 'masterpiece' could maybe be your heart, your innocence, that he tarnished. The wall you speak of could be the walls of yourself. You feel hollow now, more like an object than a person.

Although this piece is very sad, I liked the painter and the canvas metaphor. Great job!

Great write, a very hard subject to write about especially if this is from personal experience.

nominated.

And today is the day I wore makeup...this got to me.
I love how it is phrased so perfectly and it got me into tears.
The stanzas go so well together and it has amazing imagery.
This took my breath away and left me speechless.
I also love how I can relate to this because I know how it feels.
So 5/5 from me.
Thanks for writing this, I quite enjoyed reading it.
~Dominique~

OMG Saffie!!
This poem just took me back to a oiece I wrote long ago. The painter and the paint metaphors are used incredibly in this piece. Your ooems are always relatable, and I always find myself feeling as if I had penned the piece myself, we are so alike in the way we write.

LOVED IT!
xxx

Well, the title caught my eye and I immediately felt a little uncertain because this is a subject that really speaks to my heart, as I am sure it does many.
You captured the right amount of darkness while still allowing the piece to be poetic. You didn't go overboard but you still touched my heart.

The imagery was powerful, yet not overpowering and the wording, simple yet effective.

xx

O my it's quite... I don't know it's dark and yet so beautiful in the details and in the way the pathos of the poem just shouts at the soul I quite wanted to hug the person that had this happened to them I guess my maternal instincts were awakened with this piece and I got to say you made the imagery and flow seem so natural yet it made me pray my daughters never have to go through this! Great job 5/5

-Bet