by Angel
Nice one |
by Beautiful Soul
I really liked the metaphor you used here. It seems like the waves are your negative emotions and you cannot control them anymore. With each new memory you see or think about the more emotional you become inside. The second stanza tore me because we always blame ourselves when we get hurt when it's never our fault. Though you may appear weak you are not because you survived this. I did like the wording though. There is always a tiny bit of hope inside and that hope can be a light. But the ending is sad. You wash upon the shores of your mind and now you are more lost than you were before. You were once a happy and outgoing child but now its very hard. Good write |
I really like the idea of the ocean, the waves, are a big body of emotions, mostly regret and guilt. You blame yourself for every bad memory from your past. It's like you are on an island, isolating yourself and reliving the past, letting each memory wash upon the shore and letting the waves of regret just knock you down. |
by Burning Angel
This is such a good poem. |
The ocean gives me a feeling of freedom and I love how you use the ocean. Never allow people to take over your identity . They will power over you and you need to break away from it. Be yourself and remain strong. Whatever happened during childhood is over and you did not have much of a choice. Now since your older try not to let this reflect on your adult life. This is amazing written. Reminds me of me. |