Wow. This is lovely, keep up the great work! :)

I do not like the layout of the poem, I find it puts people off reading the poem when they see it all together, I am not sure why this is. Layout should not matter, and yet it does.

But I suggest you change it, just space it out more so it is a bit easier on the eye. I am so glad I read this because your words are great, and fit together well. The flow is actually really good, and the meaning is strong and relevant to the world, and how it is changing, and what the causes are of the pain and loneliness in the world.

I thought you done a brilliant job with the message of your poem, and also your title.

My only small issue is just the layout, but I hope other reader's will give the poem a chance if you do not change this.

Nice work.