Comments : My Pride

  • 10 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    I have danced with the vampire
    howled with the wolf
    Battled the warrior
    Fought in the snow
    ^^
    Amazing intro!!!
    I love every line!
    I like how you used and linked vampire, wolf, warrior and snow, the flow is also great!

    I have held the defeated
    defended the strong
    Argued the right
    Corrected the wrong
    ^^
    Love your choice of words in this stanza, it allows the flow to remain!

    I have seen the star-gazer
    heard his song
    with eyes closed tight
    Seen a road so long
    ^^
    This is very creative, it allows the reader to picture what it would look like, sound like and visualise, truly an effective technique!

    Through grinning gargoyles
    and the giggling ghoul
    no more lies
    I have seen the soul
    ^^
    WOW utterly magnificent!
    I have to say that is a marvellous way to end an already amazing piece! So impactful and breathtaking!!

    If only I could give you 100/100

    5/5

    • 10 years ago

      by Court

      I'm not sure it's worthy of all that, but thank you very much for the praise and kind words. :)

    • 10 years ago

      by Court

      I'm not sure it's worthy of all that, but thank you very much for the praise and kind words. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    I wish I could nominate it, but for some reason I cant :( But im definitely adding this as my favourite poem! :)

    • 10 years ago

      by Court

      Thank you :D