Comments : Vision

  • 10 years ago

    by Lemon

    You have some strong ideas in this poem :). However I think you could get the point of them across better if you wrote your poem in verses. Having the whole poem in a big block makes it a little harder to read and it puts less emphasis on the important lines.

    Also I think the word you are looking for is "fall" not "fell". "Fell" is the past tense version :)

    Lovely poem though, a very dear expression of love :)

    • 10 years ago

      by Veronica

      Thank you for the tips!

  • 9 years ago

    by Bobby

    You have a gift in writing with deep feeling, one that reads your work and words can feel the deepness of the feelings. Keep writing and keep believing in Him for in life time will always speak all on what is true. Love is an ever lasting story. Even those that sometimes brings pain within our hearts

    • 9 years ago

      by Veronica

      Hello how are you doing ?I pray this message reach you in the best of health. I do have a desire to write poems, even children book I pray that the Lord will order my steps and I step into my calling you know it's hard sometime but God is pulling me into a direction that 's greater then I can image sometime but I give him all the glory .I need to hear this but I happen to login to page and I haven't been on here in a while I found this page when I was going through a trail in my life and I said I want to encourage someone in spite if I'm going through something I want to be able to up lift other spirits through Jesus Christ who inspire me to write but I pray all things is well with you and your love ones be bless and have a bless day! And thank for the encouraging words. It meant a lot .Thank You!