Comments : Hello Spring (haiku)

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    You paint the scene nicely here too saffie.

    First line- There os a lot you can say about this line honestly. First of all when I think of the word wind swept I can imagine the snow blowing all around and the trees were buried in snow and the air was chilly. I really liked the use of whisper in the second stanza because I think the trees were "tired" of the snow and they had no energy left. Like a person whom is very tired or exhausted they don't speak very loud so they are "whispering" in some sense. The deeper meaning of the word embrace is great because spring time is like a friend you havnt seen in a while so the first thing you want to do is hug them. Overall I loved how you made the trees a person here. You did a great job in staying with the story and going through the seasons NOW so present tense like a haiku should. :)