I wrote something with a similar title. glad yours is a bit less horrifying than mine was.

Anyway, on to this piece:

I am not sure if this piece did what it seems you intended for it to do, but I think it has enough love and emotion that it just might have. although the commas after every line were really unnecessary and detract from the strength of each line. Also the lack of capitalization is a personal choice, which I completely understand but in this piece, with the message you are writing it just makes you look lazy and like maybe this person really does deserve better cause you don't quite care. I am not meaning to say that iyou actually ARE lazy or don't care, just that maybe capitalization would help make the piece a bit stronger.

well written. like i said i like the use of emotion.