Star wars

Wow what a truly beautiful masterpiece you have written here.

Like others I thought oh star wars as in the movie so I must admit I reluctant to open it but as you are a good writer I did anyway and I'm so glad that I did.
Your imagery is sufficient.

I think there is a typo on this line 'I'm one of they..' If think they should be them.

Take care, Em

Honestly when I read the title I thought it was about the movie "Star Wars" but then after reading it I realized its more about the galaxy and their stunning atmosphere. Overall I liked the description and in just a short verse you made it vivid.

Just one thing with this line:

their fall is bright and heroic.
I'm one of they

^^Did you mean I'm one of them...?

This is an excellent poem overall. The imagery you provide is stunning and the lines flow very well together. The whole scene seems to be about a war in the heavens. Meaning stars, planets or anything like that. But since you named it star wars I'll go with that. For me I believe stars could be angel eyes looking down at us. Dauntless is a great word as well. Very brave. Great write

Thanks for returning the favour Po whet

you have written so much yet have little or no comments.
I hope some of my favourite authors see this and take a look at your work

he can be found here http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=474118

Nice ending to a clever write, there is great attention to detail in this and I love the whole atmosphere of this.

nice write