Your words have potential, but the layout is too off-putting to readers.

I suggest you take some time to put it in some stanzas, verses, break it up a little, and more people will be able to read it.

The poems have to be quite appealing to the eye, your work deserves to be read.

Thanks! yeah i really didnt break it up like i should i was just finished with it and posted it i think i get too excited when i feel almost done writing. I appreciate the tips.