Moon Light
by Lilninja Apr 4, 2014
|
The moon shines so bright above as if it's my guide throughout the night and in hopes that I'll make it till morning light without a tear drop or shed of blood. My heart slows with every breath and I try to fight the sleepiness that grows, whether or not I shall wake again I beg for the moon light above to guide me once again. |
Did You Like This Poem?
Latest Comments
-
10 years ago
by Lilninja
This one i really dont know how to break up at all this was an old one i found and decided to post it. Can you give me any suggestions to break this one up? Also i've been away from writing for a long time and just getting back into things. I appreciate your comments :)
-
10 years ago
by Baby Rainbow
Again, the layout here does not appeal to the eye, which is a shame, as people will over look this poem which has such good potential.
You are combining nature here, with the depression, loneliness and hopelessness that you feel about life.
Your words are good, they will be better in stanzas, and get much more readers.
Your titles are really good and eye catching, so you will draw people in with them.
