Serene

Judges comments

This poem has a professional feel about it. Some fantastic word choice used throughout and I love the rhyming scheme. It is nice to read a good rhyming poem now and again and this is really good. My only gripe is the choice of 'winds' and 'minds'. Now is this 'winds' as in weather or 'winds' as in the turn or wind-up?
I will chalk that up to artistic licence and maybe a curve ball thrown in purposefully.
What I would add is that the imagery and intelligence of this piece is superb. So many lines that I wish I had thought of, Just take the last line and enjoy its emotion.
I also love the 'lost kite chasing', the 'spiralling to celestial minds' and 'Pitch black past visions'.
Easily worth at least 4 points. Well done.

I like the images you have drawn and the feelings that touches the heart. Another lovely piece and congratulation on the win.

Sorry I haven't commented earlier. Sadness is clearly presented with your words. I sense a person or for that matter two people, thinking about what had been between them, past memories and how the love is gone, no longer there and how sad they are. Well done. Congratulations on winning.