by Gone Forever Apr 17, 2014
category :
Life, society /
about society
Sit down and look around, |
Sit down and look around, |
by Isabella
Well done.great writing,I have to.agree with beautiful soul on what was said..out standing work |
by BlueJay
I love the way you make everyone seem so invisible in their own helplessly perfect ways. You have a way with words here that is honestly amazing. I just wish you weren't so spot on with this. |
by BlueJay
I love the way you make everyone seem so invisible in their own helplessly perfect ways. You have a way with words here that is honestly amazing. I just wish you weren't so spot on with this. |
by Beautiful Soul
I really liked and connect with this poem well. I'll get technical stuff out of the way. I didn't see anything wrong and the rhyming was really well! The poem as a whole flowed very well. Now the message is very strong because a lot of people go through this everyday. I think it's more relatable because you don't seem to have a main character so it targets the readers. :) it's unique in that way. The point of view is beautiful. I believe what you are trying to say that people who are the most quiet are the most overlooked and sadly that is true. People with the kindest hearts are the one's who hurt the most and often people don't see them and it's sad. Society is cruel. Anyways beautiful write because it's true! |
by Gone Forever
Thank you. It means I lot that you can connect. I was challenged with this poem for an assignment for my psychology class and thought I would post it. |