by Beautiful Soul
It's always very unique and difficult to write a three stanza acrostic and make it flow well but you have dione so well here. Also the first thing I want to point out is the point of view. :) I truly loved how you personally are the baby in the poem. Using "my" feet and such proves this. But I thought it was clever. Anyway. The poems message is very simplistic but it is very rich with imagery. Which is what you need in an acrostic I feel. I believe the message is this family is having a baby soon and they are very excited, but by the way you talk it could be their very first one :). The poem as a whole is very beautiful and thoughtful. Well done! Edit: another thing to point out is the title it's perfect I feel because Ryder is the main character and although you cannot "see" him yet you did a fantastic job "showing" us the side when they are born. The emotions are very well done because you paid attention in great detail to each person feelings "Showing" us how they will feel when the baby is born. :) |