Hips

by Narph   May 14, 2014


He dreamed of dancing naked
in muddier marshes, how his
portbellied figure would deceive the eye, as it
pranced and plummeted, limber and
opulent in the glossy heat --
perhaps his toes would catch the sun like
opals, or the undulations of his
thick skin might wrinkle and wink,
and in the scorching wind, the tiny hairs of his
muzzle would shimmy like lovers.... Oh, to be
unadorned, bare, and toothed....
sometimes he wishes he were beautiful.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I truly love this poem!
    I'm going to take my analogy and assume it's in regards to a cute little potbellied pig or piglet and say his name is Hips, ha ha!
    What a beautiful word display this poem has! Very elegant and just a lovely piece!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Judging comment:

    There's such spirit in this piece, it's a youthfulness that makes this poem come alive to the reader. I liked how this was a different image then one may first consider... an older man, more heavyset, but still wanting to dance and dream. Maybe that's been denied of him before, but he wants to have no cares and maybe re-connect with that childish desire to "feel free". From the last lines I gathered that he does not consider himself beautiful based on society's standards but also, on a deeper level, that he does not have daily confidence or the self-esteem to boldly go out in the world and say, "this is me". Vivid imagery and wonderful verbs that gave impact. I felt this author knew how to craft and use those verbs to create a scene and story of this man, each word with purpose. (4)

  • 10 years ago

    by Darren

    Congrats narph, a worthy win.

  • 10 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Hehehe, what an adorable piglet.

  • 10 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    I can absolutely relate to this poem and his wistful attitude. In fact, there are times I come close to carrying out the dream. However, since I suspect that your protagonist is four-legged, he would probably get away with it much easier than me.
    Congratulations on your win.

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